"Lobo," by Justin Paul Walters

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"Lobo," by Justin Paul Walters

Post by Kenwood on Mon Jun 13, 2011 10:54 pm

Anyone wishing to add some thoughts about this particular story and/or author, feel free to do so here. Praise and criticism is encouraged equally, but please keep the latter on the constructive side.

BEWARE OF SPOILERS!

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Re: "Lobo," by Justin Paul Walters

Post by scottmitchell74 on Thu Sep 15, 2011 9:37 pm

I'm sort of dull with poetry. If I follow, this is a slash (/) sort of poem/story that goes back and forth between a hitman and his love/memories of his mother's baking? Killing/eating?

Anyway, I liked it. It may take some more readings.


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Re: "Lobo," by Justin Paul Walters

Post by Shiney on Thu Sep 15, 2011 9:45 pm

You're pretty close.


It gets better with each read.

And the fine author of that tale is a regular Totemite here.....

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Re: "Lobo," by Justin Paul Walters

Post by Kenwood on Thu Sep 15, 2011 10:09 pm

It's not a poem, either. =)

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Re: "Lobo," by Justin Paul Walters

Post by Paul Walters on Fri Sep 16, 2011 11:55 am

Thanks Scott. I think. Smile

But really, I think you have the basic idea. I'm hesitant to say "this is how you should interpret it" because I know that even with longer stories and novels people interpret things differently. And that's good. One of my favorite stories from Issue #3 was "Wanting It" because of how the whole story could be used as an analogy for so many different things. I love those kinds of tales, that can tell a new story on each level you look at them. Not saying this is one of those, but I did make an attempt at least.

On a basic level though, it's about a hit man who doesn't want to be a hit man, but is forced into the position through a lack of other options. Of course, I tried to make it about more than that basic premise, but I'll leave those interpretations up to the reader.

By the way, I'd agree with Ken, it's not really a poem. I actually set out originally to write this as a good old Shakespearean Sonnet, with the rigid fourteen line form and alternating rhyming scheme, the works. But as I was writing it, it just felt far too rigid, and frankly, not very fun to read. So I kept the iambic pentameter structure and the final couplet but scrapped everything else, and this is what came out. Not so much a poem, but a story told in verse.

Wow, that was way more than I expected to write. Brevity is not one of my talents. Anyway, thanks again for reading, glad you liked it!

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