"The Meat Forest," by John Haggerty

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"The Meat Forest," by John Haggerty

Post by Kenwood on Thu Jan 13, 2011 9:57 pm

Anyone wishing to add some thoughts about this particular story and/or author, feel free to do so here. Praise and criticism is encouraged equally, but please keep the latter on the constructive side.

BEWARE OF SPOILERS!

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Re: "The Meat Forest," by John Haggerty

Post by steven pirie on Sun Feb 06, 2011 12:01 pm

This one seemed to end rather abruptly. It took me time to figure out what was going on, but when I did the tale moved along quite nicely. I do think it left far more unanswered than answered with that sudden ending, though.

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Re: "The Meat Forest," by John Haggerty

Post by Kenwood on Sun Feb 06, 2011 3:38 pm

I still really like this one, but I agree that it's a story that begs to me expanded.

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Post by Mercedes on Sun Feb 06, 2011 4:24 pm

I want it expanded, but that's just because I dug it so much. I loved the characters, I loved the chilling forest, and I dug that it flashed me briefly back to "Tron", "The Forest of Hands and Teeth", and "The Hunter" (from L.J. Smith's "The Game" series) while still being it's own completely unique story. It didn't really borrow from anything but still sent my mind in a million different places.

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Post by steven pirie on Sun Feb 06, 2011 4:30 pm

I think it needs expanding because as it stands everything in the build up to the last few lines is just there as a vehicle to show that in this kind of post-apocalyptic New-Russian Gulag world there's no compassion, or loyalty, and that it's every man for himself. And that's a shame because as a build up it's a really good build up, and there's much more story to tell...


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Re: "The Meat Forest," by John Haggerty

Post by Tall Tyrion on Fri Mar 11, 2011 11:37 am

Rock on!

I loved this one as well.

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Post by Paul Walters on Wed Mar 16, 2011 12:00 pm

Loved this one. I'm not sure I agree that it ended too abruptly, though. To me, it ended right where it needed to. The political, for all of his ideals and morals, ended up selling out to the same self-preservation instincts that everyone else has. From there, you can pretty much deduce how the rest of his story goes. That moment, as the turning point of his world-view, works well as the climax and ending to the story.

Of course, that isn't to say I wouldn't love the story to be expanded, because this world feels ripe for the telling. Just in this instance though, John ended the tale just right.

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Post by Tim Lieder on Fri Mar 18, 2011 3:17 am

It might have ended abruptly but I have a feeling that there was enough to the story that if he kept going with it, he might have had to write a novella or novel from the material.

I loved how the characters seemed to echo Lenin and Stalin with the narrator being the idealist Lenin who wants to create the world anew while the main thug is a Stalin that he considers to be a useful tool in the journey but one that is liable to take over at any moment.

As much as I liked the ending and thought that it was the best ending for the story as it was with the space alloted, I would really like to see the author return to the story and expand it into a larger piece.

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Re: "The Meat Forest," by John Haggerty

Post by john haggerty on Fri Mar 18, 2011 3:59 pm

Thanks for your comments, everyone.

Even before Shock Totem accepted this (thanks, Shock Totem--I'm really happy to be part of issue #3) I thought I should probably expand it into a novel, so I'm glad to see that others see some potential there too.

Right now I'm about 80% of the way done with my first novel (a crime/satire thing about gambling and god and sex and death in Nevada-sort of Carl Hiassen meets Cormac McCarthy in the desert) so it will be a while before I get to this, but I'm encouraged that my meat forest might have legs.

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Post by Kenwood on Fri Mar 18, 2011 4:20 pm

There's also room for a short story or two. =)

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Post by Mercedes on Fri Mar 18, 2011 8:47 pm

Basically we're begging you for more, John. And that just rocks.

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Post by Tall Tyrion on Fri Mar 18, 2011 9:03 pm

Keep us updated on the progress of that novel. It sounds cool.

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Post by scottmitchell74 on Mon Sep 12, 2011 4:44 pm

***Been gone a long time folks, but finally bought #'s 3 and 4. Happy to be back at the Totem***

This story worked well as is...and had me wanting so much more! I'm very interested in the "meat forest". I want to know more about it, where it came from, what it is, the characters, etc...


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